Natyr Lucio

The end was abrupt, unexpected, and yes definitely need some leading into it. Otherwise, it totally defeats the purpose of the poem up until that point. There was a disrupted ...

Your flow totally shifted in the middle of the poem. The random shifting of sentence structure also didn't work too well for you. I liked how the theme of the ...

Onomatopoeia That is an interesting piece... and the last line mae me laugh. I have nothing against its theme. Everything works perfectly. And yet...it's such a simple piece. Ahah.

Um, yeah...guys are materialistic where I live. They don't think jeans before they think Hollister or American Eagle. It's all about brand name to a lot of guys here, because ...

The flow freaked out a little in the end, but nothing terrible. I could analyze it just fine. Four stars. Oh weird...I've never actually used stars to judge anything before. ...

Aha! Yeah, so I loved this one. There was no suspense or intensity or anything. It was pure romance and then the sudden shock of reality and it was great. ...

Okay. Flow gets choppy at parts. It's nothing extreme, but definitely something to look into correcting. Also, the poem switches language use several times. At one point, it will use ...

Some criticism I was able to gather: You changed your theme from self-based to relationship-based toward the end of the poem, which threw off the meaning you held constant throughout ...

It seems more like you half-imitated something by E.E. Cummings. There was really no point behind it; there was no intensity, no invoked feeling. It was just kind of...there. I ...

I got what you meant. A few short criticisms I picked up on. There were several spelling errors, so perhaps you should have friends check poetry over after you revise ...

Great poem, and the narrative structure was virtually flawless. However, I do think you should have carried that romantic intensity further. It missed a climax. You build up the audience's ...

All right, the last line was really strong. However, while you got the meaning of the poem across, you used a really choppy flow to do it. The rhyme scheme ...

Well I got the idea for the first line from my avatar, and the only reason I have that avatar is because...I suppose I have an attraction to blue frogs. ...

Bitterness Blue-speckled frogs shoot arrows at her They think she is a pole Something to be stuck to when it snows When the cold makes numb the skin When the ...

Let's get something straight. That was hardcore poetry minus emo times three hundred. Uber kudos to you.